Now it's your turn to share the haiku poem you wrote that you liked the best. Remember that the one you post must be the one you worked on and did the following things in your second draft:
1. You corrected the spelling.
2. You showed the events or objects rather than told about them.
3. You used the 5 senses.
4. You looked up at least 2 boring words from your first draft in the thesaurus and replaced them with
words you thought were more descriptive.
Here is the one I'm submitting, even though I want to write another one about lilacs because I just saw little purple blooms when I got home today.
"Speckles"
My dog loves to run
Leaping, dashing through the yard
Tired, he rests on grass
Ellie Said:
ReplyDeleteGrace
Grace makes me feel great
I have known her forever
WOW Grace is awesome!
Miss Shaw said...It's nice that you chose to write a tribute to a person, Ellie. Did you write one about nature too? I'd love to read that one too.
ReplyDeleteLucia said...
ReplyDeleteKnox
I can see my dog
He is perfect in heaven
In the stars he lay
Violet said
ReplyDeletePalm trees
Palm trees swaying from
The lightly blowing wind on
The beach of soft sand
Grace said
ReplyDeleteRain
Rain waters the earth
rain supplies us icy water
rain makes nature grow!
Jake said
ReplyDeleteStorms
I do not like storms
rain pelts my window. Look out!
watch out for a storm
Oscar said
ReplyDeleteStella (dog)
A little cute dog
In a huge,giant pumpkin
And then sleeps in dirt
Violet said
ReplyDeleteLeaves
Fluttering falling
Leaves coming down from the trees
Pretty falling leaves
Birch said
ReplyDeleteThe Jungle
The jungle has vines
The jungle makes weird weird noises
Also I sniff the flowers
The last one was a mistake
ReplyDeleteolivia said
Trees
Squrriels in a nest
With leaves droping to the ground
Branches in the sky
Jackie
ReplyDeleteWHERE IS MY DOG
Where is my dog now?
i looked under the bushes
he isin the leaves!
Lucie said-
ReplyDeleteThe Jungle
by: Lucie Kalgreen
Trees are everywhere,
Long vines hanging up above,
Pouring on the ground.
Nicholas said...
ReplyDeleteThe Furious Jungle
Trees are all around
like a jungle with thick clouds
roaming the sky.
Montse said... (fixed last post)
ReplyDeleteThe Ocean
The water is blue
I can see fish swim in it
I feel the wet sand
Matthew said
ReplyDeleteRAIN!
BY: Matthew Enck
Rain, rain rain rain rain
Rain, you view it in the air
Go away swiftly!
Porter said...
ReplyDeleteA cheetah dashed across the prairie
cheetahs are asome
cheetahs are the coolist
jack said...
ReplyDeleteMangos
mangos are awesome
i go out and pick mangos
near the roaring sea
Noah said
ReplyDeleteMy cat likes to play.
She thinks nature is awesome
She is very Beast
Josh Said
ReplyDeleteRain
Very damp outside
Rain is pelting the window
GRAB YOUR UMBRELLA!!
Thomas said...
ReplyDeletePenguins
sleek, dark, gliding by
slipping through the dark deep sea
where will he find fish?
Zach said...
ReplyDeleteLarge Gray Clouds
Flashing Silver in the Air
Boom! Crackle! Boom! Boom!
Griffin said.....
ReplyDeleteRain
Rain is heaven’s cry.
Running down my face is wet.
Trickle off my chin.
Luke said
ReplyDeleteTiger is dashing
Tiger dashing through the leaves
Tiger is tired
, Luke
There are so many wonderful visions in your haiku poems. I'm wondering if you can think of a topic where you can write an entire book about it in haiku. We will read a book by Andrew Clements this week that does just that.
ReplyDeleteEva said
ReplyDeleteApes steal salty chips
Furry ape jumped on my back
I love Gibraltar!
Lukas said
ReplyDeleteBirds
soaring the sky
chirping here and there
birds every where
Lucia said
ReplyDeleteI read all of our Haiku poems and I think they are great.
My cat loves to run
ReplyDeleteHe dashes all day in the sun
I adore my kitty
[alexa]
Birds
ReplyDeletethey fly through the sky
they fly every day and week
chirping every where
Ellie